1) the Keyhotee image on page 8 is different from the logo displayed on the Bitshares.org/solutions website. you may want to consider changing it just for the sake of being consistent
2) "You can even keep them all for your own greedy personal gain" this line on page 4 comes off a bit abrasive, but perhaps this was your intent?
overall an exciting newsletter, there are absolutely tons of projects to be hyped about