Here is another customized version:
Thanks a lot for your help!
First line is not legible enough. Could you outline it, or darken it or somehow make it stand out just a little more? And the "a"s and "o"s appear to be virtually the same. Can they be more distinguishable?
The whole thing is too "busy". Please try combining 3rd line into 2nd line, drop the "now", and make the 2nd line's font size smaller than top line:
BitShares 2.0 with Privacy ModeI think that would do it. I appreciate your efforts!