looking good so far!
and now for a few nitpicky suggestions
- move the raven/mystique pic down below the 'Now real world currencies...' or 'In english...' blurbs. the first time I read through the post, i thought to myself "why am i looking at Raven right now???" and it became a lot more clear after the next 2 sentences
next, I think the * footnotes interrupt the flow of the pitch. here's an edit I made, i think it might flow a bit better:
TradersIt should go without saying that the privacy, freedom from confiscation and other advantages of trading on a blockchain will appeal to many of the hundreds of thousands of traders currently engaged in trading currencies, commodities and stocks all around the world.
In order to support such trading activities, BitShares X introduces TITAN - A brand new privacy feature which allows for fully secure, anonymous transactions, transferred to and from easy to remember user-created, account names.