Some remarks:
- "Such a big stake" -> "This stake"
- "No question, the BitShares ecosystem need more" -> "No question, the BitShares ecosystem can pay for many more
- remove that part: "and BitAsset market orders" -- transactions can be done in
bitUSD, bitEUR or BTS!
- "The Report" -> The report
- Remove that sentence "I know that the KettenBlog is not a game changer but I believe it provides a great source in many aspects."
- The graphics on page 3 is a little blurry
- delegate name needs to be presented more
- If I were you, I would put myself into the bounty section and pay a bounty to
the work I do on my own and only pay a minor "fee" to may self. 20% sounds too
much as it has the character of a "fee"
- You will need to pay income tax on delegate pay!! At least that is my
understanding, need to check with tax attorney though - better set aside a
portion to pay the tax!!