this one is straightforward. just making sure there aren't any gaffes.
update: second paragraph removed, couple of typos and grammar errors fixed.
The Bitshares community is a group of entrepreneurs and investors rallying around Invictus to help support innovative new ways to put blockchain technology to work by competing with profitable corporations whose purpose can now be automated online by a set of predefined rules. Distributed autonomous corporations make money for their shareholders without relying on centralized and human corruptible means to facilitate their services.
In addition to being a standard cryptocurrency, the developers of Bitshares have established a support structure that encourages innovative new ways to use blockchains. Currently in the works are projects that will provide decentralized competition to banks, online music stores, centralized gambling sites, insurance companies, state sponsored lotteries, voting booth companies, and more. Anybody, rich or poor, wanting to support the project may do so without being stonewalled by regulation, and share in it's eventual success.