Hey did you noticed this here?
Hey, cas. I noticed on the side where 'the bank wins', the last point says "interes" instead of "interest".
Hey guys, I'm sorry I'm just coming to you now, but I just found this thread today and think I may have some useful suggestion (take what you like, leave the rest :-)
1) on the heading, i would add the word
"Interest" after "5%" (or dividend(??)...though I like interest better- more universal) Also would change
"anything" to
"everything"2) on the second statement I would leave it at:
"Bitshares is the first Decentralized Autonomous Company that allows you to speculate on any asset imaginable and pays interest (dividends on all you asset holdings)" <--- full stop. at this point it is not important to explain how it is able to pay these divides
3) In line 3 remove the word
Lots as we are trying to distinguish ourselves as being better than a bank we do not want to drive home the similarities that much. --"
We are similar to your local bank in that Bitshares" ...........(images below)
4)To me the final section is the most important and should be presented vertically in one complete section across the entire page. Its funning that the most important bullet points discussing the benefits of bitshares on using the smallest fonts! make them bigger. Also I would lay it out something like this:
"We are similar to your local bank in that Bitshares...........(images below)"
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HOWEVER BITSHARES IS COMPLETELY FOCUSED ON BENEFITING CUSTOMERS
- Profits are paid as dividends to shareholders- (you), instead of spent uselessly on personnel lobbying and construction
- etc
-ect
ect*one thing regarding section 4) however you decide to lay it out, consider putting the "good" points to the left and the "bad" (traditional banking) points to the right.